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People usually mix their private and professional life. What are the pros and cons of this?

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Persons normally combine their own
life
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 with profession
life
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.There should be some benefits and drawbacks of it which
drescribes
give a description of
describes
describe
 in following paragraphs. Addition of professional
life
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 in private
life
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 may have
treir
consistent with fact or reality; not false
truer
 own advantages.
For example
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,
Accept space
,
living professional
life
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 can improve personal
life
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 style.People can be able to create
impression
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the impression
an impression
 towards their society.
Moreover
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, individuals should feel like their home while working.Having private
life
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 in
works
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the works
 can Enhance the attitude of the people towards professional
life
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. On the flip side
,
Accept space
,
there are some disadvantages too.
Beacause
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Because
 of own problems, people can not be able to work with focus.Attitude towards family can be affected which lowers the
perfomance
a dramatic or musical entertainment
performance
 of work.Perhaps
,
Accept space
,
they can't able to achieve their
life
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 goals completely. To conclude
this
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,
Accept space
,
using professional
life
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 along with private
life
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 can affect the overall
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life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
 of the people.

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