Nowadays we can see definite signs of surplus production in almost every industry sector, and this is leading to environmental damage. What are some possible solutions to this situation?

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day, it is noticed that the most of industries are manufacturing their

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more than consumer need

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environmental problems.

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essay, primarily, evaluates the detrimental effect of

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the surplus production

of goods and secondarily, suggest some remedial measure to alleviate the problems. On the one hand, industries today using more resources

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consumers

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they initiated making more

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the pollution and global warming. To exemplify, a recent research revealed that in Brazil, the excessive production of palm oil is the cause of deforestation and environmental change in their country.

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, if the industries use alternate methods of energy

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as electricity or hydro energy

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the pollution caused by coal of fossil fuel can be reduced to some extent. To illustrate, a recent report shown by BCC news channel that in China, they implement a law in which, if industry manufacture more goods

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than a requirement

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they have to face plenty or jail.

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may be a good example for other Nation if they follow same rules. In conclusion, it can be reiterated that the production of goods more than need is deleterious for both environment and that factory.

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, if the factory made proper planning before manufacturing of products and uses of eco-friendly

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