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Some people think it is better for people to change their career at least once in their life and do different kinds of jobs. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Life brings opportunities, many of us want to break the monotony of daily life by changing their jobs, but the other half is opposite of
this
 condition. Does it really worth it? I completely agree
this
 statement, and my essay having numerous arguments will strengthen my vision. A good reason for changing their
job
 is that, An individual can follow his ambition by achieving his dream
job
.
However
 a number of employees are working just for their family pressure. They want to do something else, but their responsibilities would not let them do. Whatever, if they follow their passion they might will give their best in the new
job
.
Moreover
,
work
 can be changed because of earning a good salary. For an example, it has been nicely said by someone that
money
 can't bring happiness, but a good
job
 can bring a lot of
money
 that can be enough to buy household things.
Therefore
, it is better to have a good
job
with
Suggestion
With
 better
money
 rather than
work
 with bad
money
.
Last
 but not the least, switching into new
work
 line, help us to remove the stress from our mind. According to a survey that had been held in Chicago, US a physiologist find out 8/10 employees having stress attack problems and they take pills regularly during the
work
.A good practice is that to find a
job
 where it has several departments and you can switch into department for the change of mindset. To cap it all
work
 should be switched to changing the routine and sometimes
for getting
dismiss from the mind; stop remembering
forgetting
 dream
job
. It leads to gaining of more knowledge of different king of jobs as well.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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