The charts below show that UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full time work after leaving college in 2008

The charts below show that UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full time work after leaving college in 2008
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graduate
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and
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participated
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college graduation apart from
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in 2008. Strikingly,
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study was the most popular choice of
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, compared to the least
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of Voluntary
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. Regarding
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students
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, the highest number
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study, at 29665
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reported the lowest date in the total choices of them, at only 3500
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. The number of
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who chose
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Job was higher than the figure for Unemployment, with nearly 18000 and over 16000
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, respectively. For
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in the same year,
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study
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headed the list with 2725
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, closely followed by Part time
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with over 2500 choices.
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there were approximately 1700 post
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graduate
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graduates
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who choose Unemployment, only 345
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decided to become volunteers.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduate, work, students with synonyms.
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