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Television sports program shows such Olympic are a good source of motivation for youths who do not like to exercise much. Do you agree or disagree include examples in your answer and provide your owns opinion

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Introduction
Nowadays count of unhealthy person is increasing
rapidly so
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rapidly, so
 some sports program like Olympic become a brilliant inspiration for youngsters for doing
exercise
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. I totally agree with
this
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 statement. In my
opinion these
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opinion, these
shows play
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shows, play
 a crucial role in
youngsters
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youngster's
 life which I will elaborate in the following paragraphs.
Body paragraph 1
To commence with there are numerous ways by which people
stays
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stay
 motivated watching sports shows. A person who
do not like
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does not like
 to do
exercise
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 remain unfit and by watching Olympic programs gets some ideas like how
exercise
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 can be become interesting and want to gain fitness similar to Olympic players.
As a
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result they
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result, they
 try to become
healthy person
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a healthy person
the healthy person
. So they start doing
exercise
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 going to
gym
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the gym
 and
also
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 participate in the various fitness activities.
Body paragraph 2
Apart from
this
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 these television sports program not only inspires to do
excercise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
. Because when the youth watched these
programs they
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programs, they also
also
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 want to gain fame and
fance
a device for creating a current of air by movement of a surface or surfaces
fans
face
 like the other players. These programs make youngsters more energetic to achieve health and their goals by doing daily
exercise
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. Many
player
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players
 like Virat
kohli
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Kohli
,
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,
rohit
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Rohit
 Sharma are inspired from
television program
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the television program
television programs
a television program
 to become successful and fit.
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Moreover by
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Moreover, by
 knowing the struggle of these people, some youngsters who are not mentally strong get inspiration to do hard work and successful like them.
Conclusion
To
recapulat
regain or make up for
recuperate
e account to me television sport programs play an important role as a source of motivation directly and indirectly in the
youngster
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youngster's
s life

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pinnacle of athletic achievement
  • Inspire youths
  • Set personal fitness goals
  • Pique interest
  • Physical activities
  • Appealing
  • Dedication
  • Discipline
  • Motivational tool
  • Incorporate exercise
  • Relatable stories
  • Overcoming obstacles
  • Active lifestyle
  • Supportive environments
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