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To solve the ever-increasing environmental hazards throughout the world, the best way is to increase the price of fuel. What is your opinion on the above assumptions?

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In the present world, we have seen our environment is deteriorating at a drastic level, which is true for all countries whatsoever.
However
,
a
Suggestion
A
fuel
 which is Petrol, diesel, octane, gasoline,
etc
 has a vital link to environment pollution which cannot be avoided.
Although
,
fuel
 is one of the active reasons of environmental pollution, but it is disagreed that increase of
fuel
price
 would solve the issue. Analysing other ingredients responsible for environmental pollution and the obnoxious effects of those as well as consequence of increasing
fuel
price
 will prove
this
.
Firstly
, if we consider other ingredients rather than
fuel
 responsible for environmental
hazard
 we have to mention the excessive
usage
 of
plastic
 products in our daily life.
For instance
,
plastic
 products can not dissolve completely and stored as a
hazard
 to pollute land, seawater as well as air. The devastating effect of
plastic
 products is not less than the effect of
fuel
.
Therefore
,
this
 makes it clear that the best way to control environmental
hazardshazard
 through increasing
fuel
price
 cannot be the only best way as we have to consider banning
plastic
 products which is
also
 responsible in
this
 regard.
Secondly
, we should not think that increasing
fuel
price
 will cut down
usage
 of it in transportation modes and in factories as the modern world has been dependent on it totally.
For example
, even if the government increase
fuel
price
, people have to join their workplace, raw materials have to be transported to factories, factories have to run to meet increasing demands. Since,
fuel
price
 will increase, prices of finished products as well as transportation cost will be getting higher which will make an inflation in the economy.
Thus
, increasing
fuel
price
 will not help in controlling environmental
hazard
, rather it will attack directly on wallet of general people. To summarise,
fuel
 is not only active ingredient responsible for environmental
hazard
 and increasing
fuel
price
 will not necessarily decrease the
usage
 of
fuel
 as we are dependent on it.
Therefore
, it is clear that increasing
fuel
price
 will not solve the alarming issue of environmental
hazard
 throughout the world. In
this
 circumstance, alternative and environmentally friendly energy sources should be invented as well as we have to curb the
usage
 of hazardous products to solve the problem.
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