The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.
The bar charts show the three different types of telephone calls in the UK from 1995 to 2002. The figures are given in billions of minutes.
Overall
, it can be seen that the local calls were the most popular
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with the national and international calls and mobile calls which
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lowest over the entire period.
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the most popular used, there was a steady growth of billion minutes spent on local calls over 70 in 1995 and peaked
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the highest point at 90 in 1999 before it
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turned to drop gradually to its
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point in the
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three years which was not much different with others. Meanwhile, the national and international calls
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considerably increased from below 40 in 1995 to over 60 in 2002.
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mobile usage, even
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was the least used, among others, there was an upward
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which climbed moderately from below 10 in 1995 to over 10 in 1999 and sharply jumped to over 40 in the final year.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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