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Some people think young people are suitable for learning foreign languages.Some think adults are more suitable.Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

It is considered by some that in order to learn
foreign
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 language childhood is the best age,
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 some argue that adults have more potential to grasp learning skills in a quicker manner.
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 essay will take into consideration both sides of the statement.I,
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, believe that adulthood is the most appropriate phase of life to gain valuable skills. The proponents think that an individual can learn a foreign speech much quicker than adults.
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 is probably
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 the reason that in the formative
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 of life, learning ability is faster and even psychologists mention that children imitate whatever they listen
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, exposure of children to new linguistic skills should be done in those
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, at the age of
2-3years
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, they can learn two languages simultaneously simply by imitating others.
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, the opponents of the view think that a person can become a better dialect in the later
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 of life.
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 the fact that in today's
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world,
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 employers recruit employees who are good
speaker
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 in more than one.
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, their desire to get good career opportunities might act as a motivation and encourage them to be a good learner.
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, they can compare the rules
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that they already know with the foreign ones.
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 way their willingness to achieve success always instills a feeling of determination in them to get control over more languages.
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, I reiterate my opinion that our youth is more adaptive in nature and have more potential for languages spoken in other countries in comparison to young ones who lose interest in learning easily.

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coherence cohesion
Your introduction lacks clarity and conciseness. Start by clearly stating the issue and your position on it. Additionally, make sure to summarize the points you will discuss in the body paragraphs.
task achievement
Your main points are somewhat relevant to the topic, but they lack in-depth explanation and commitment to a particular viewpoint. Provide a more thorough discussion of each perspective, including specific examples and explanations to support your opinion.
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