With the help of internet and television many people are becoming famous. Is this a positive or negative trend? Include examples.

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Internet
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The internet
is an instant
accey
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to mine of information.
Where as
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Whereas
television work for entertaining people. Apart from all, they are now working to boost people who are willing to become popular. In
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essay, I will discuss about
benefits
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the benefits
and drawbacks of
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the Internet
and television.
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with,
telant
natural abilities or qualities
talent
is getting recognized. Television
are providing
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is providing
platform for children and adults to present their talent by providing them platform to encourage them.
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,
internet
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the internet
is easily accessible by everyone which works as noon for talented flocks. To exemplify, Americans got talent is a well recognized platform to embrace success.
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, people get well paid off for their talent in terms of revenues by many websites and reality programmes.
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Also some
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Also, some
fitness
freck
a person or animal that is markedly unusual or deformed
freak
videos and healthy diet food are
also
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trending, as people are becoming more cautious about health. On the darker side, getting famous can be deleterious. People may become egoistic and stubborn. To cite an example, internet sensation Ranu Mondal who was singing on railway stations became celebrity overnight but,
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changed her personality.
In addition
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, multitude can indulge themselves in deleterious activities to embrace success by many frauds. To recapitulate,
internet
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the internet
and televisions have now totally changes the scenario as compared to
past
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the past
.
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they have eased our lives by providing
chance
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chances
to get
game
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a game
the game
but, there are side effects
too
in the direction of
to
which outweighs the benefits.

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