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will modern technology, such internet,ever replace the book or the written word as the main source of infirmation?

#technology #internet #book #word #source #infirmation
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In modern days
,
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technology
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 plays an important role in our
life
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.
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Internet
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The internet
 makes our
life
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easy
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easier
,
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and the book or the written
word
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 helps us to keep
shophisticated
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the sophisticated document
sophisticated document
document
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.
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Internet
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The internet
 makes our
life
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 more comfortable in current days than previous days.It provides us a number of opportunities
ti
in the direction of
to
 make easy of our
dayly
every day; without missing a day
daily
 works.By using
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internet
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the internet
 we find many important
information
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 without
spend
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spending
 more time and effort.Through
internet
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 we can communicate each other within a short period of time, and collect many necessary
information
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 from other.By using
new invention
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the new invention
a new invention
new inventions
 of
technology
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, now days we can storage many
essantial
absolutely necessary; vitally necessary
essential
 data in
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internet system
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the internet system
.
On the other hand
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, it has a chance to destroy our security.
Hostail
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 always search a way to destroy our
life
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,
Useing
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Using
 modern
techonology
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
 they can leak our
information
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 more
comfortabily
in mental comfort; without stress
comfortably
.We need to keep our
techonology
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
 upgrade.Hopefully
,
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,
in future we will get more safe
vertual
being actually such in almost every respect
virtual
vital
life
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. The written
word
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always consider
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always considers
 as a great way to contain
information
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. The written
word
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 used to keep
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document
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the document
 as well as it is
using
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used
 in current days.We can use written
word
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document
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 anywhere without using any device or
internet
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 connection. It can use anyone without any knowledge about modern
technology
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.
In contrast
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 to
,
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,
sometimes it is difficult to carry the written book if its size is large and heavy.
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Also it
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Also, it
 has
chance
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a chance
 to damage the written
document
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. In conclusion
,
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I think that modern
technology
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can not
can not
cannot
 replace the book or written
word
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.The written
word
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always regard
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always regards
 as a better way to keep
infirmation
a message received and understood
information
 because in many
sctort
the territory occupied by one of the constituent administrative districts of a nation
states
 accept written
document
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then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 soft copy.

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