Some people feel that entertainers( e.g. film stars,pop musicians or sports star) are paid too much money. Do u agree or disagree? Which other types of jobs should be highly paid? Give reasons for your answer with relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Entertainment industry
is the one Suggestion
The entertainment industry
that is
often surrounded by controversies and the Linking Words
money
they Use synonyms
recieve
for their work is get something; come into possession of
receive
highly debatable topic
. Personally, Suggestion
a highly debatable topic
i
believe that they do get highly paid in comparison to the other professions that should be considered more in the monetary aspect if seen from the side of the refers to the speaker or writer
I
hardwork
done or the contribution made for the society as Suggestion
hard work
whole
.
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a whole
Firstly
, the exorbitant Linking Words
money
they Use synonyms
recieve
for the amount of work they do is unjustifiable. get something; come into possession of
receive
For instance
, the unbeatable success of the movie "Big-5" added 40 Linking Words
crore
to the bank account of famous actress Shrita. Suggestion
This
huge amount assigned for their Linking Words
hardwork work
in single movie is something that cannot defend the 3 year salary of the doctor life who might have done 1000s of surgery during that span. Suggestion
hard work
hard work work
Secondly
, if seen from the perspective of the contribution a profession make to the society, the entertainment field is not the top notch. They do have a great role in providing entertainment and relief to the people during Linking Words
stress but
they do lack behind when the ingenuity of the scientist and other professions for the betterment of people are considered.
Futhermore, the army cadets who are working selflessly on the borders away from their families risking their lives to safeguard us from the cross country threats, are paid in several thousands for Accept comma addition
stress, but
month
. Suggestion
the month
This
scenario is not appreciable. The situations, they and their families face cannot be emphasised. Linking Words
These along
with the jobs of traffic policemen, scientists, Accept comma addition
These, along
etcetra
are several other professions that need to be highly paid for their undivided attention and the lives they risk for the betterment of Suggestion
whole nation
. Suggestion
the whole nation
whole nations
This
Linking Words
money
Use synonyms
atleast
can free them from the worries they carry for the future of their families.
To conclude, Suggestion
at least
inspite
of paying an exorbitant Suggestion
in spite
money
to the ones in the entertainment field for completing or performing a single task, an Use synonyms
applaudable
amount of Suggestion
money
should be secured in the bank accounts of Use synonyms
ones
who are risking their lives and working selflessly for the betterment of all.Suggestion
the ones
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