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Some people feel that entertainers( e.g. film stars,pop musicians or sports star) are paid too much money. Do u agree or disagree? Which other types of jobs should be highly paid? Give reasons for your answer with relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Entertainment industry
Suggestion
The entertainment industry
 is the one
that is
 often surrounded by controversies and the
money
 they
recieve
get something; come into possession of
receive
 for their work is
highly debatable topic
Suggestion
a highly debatable topic
. Personally,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe that they do get highly paid in comparison to the other professions that should be considered more in the monetary aspect if seen from the side of the
hardwork
Suggestion
hard work
 done or the contribution made for the society as
whole
Suggestion
a whole
.
Firstly
, the exorbitant
money
 they
recieve
get something; come into possession of
receive
 for the amount of work they do is unjustifiable.
For instance
, the unbeatable success of the movie "Big-5" added 40
crore
 to the bank account of famous actress Shrita.
This
 huge amount assigned for their
hardwork work
Suggestion
hard work
hard work work
 in single movie is something that cannot defend the 3 year salary of the doctor life who might have done 1000s of surgery during that span.
Secondly
, if seen from the perspective of the contribution a profession make to the society, the entertainment field is not the top notch. They do have a great role in providing entertainment and relief to the people during
stress but
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stress, but
 they do lack behind when the ingenuity of the scientist and other professions for the betterment of people are considered. Futhermore, the army cadets who are working selflessly on the borders away from their families risking their lives to safeguard us from the cross country threats, are paid in several thousands for
month
Suggestion
the month
.
This
 scenario is not appreciable. The situations, they and their families face cannot be emphasised.
These along
Accept comma addition
These, along
 with the jobs of traffic policemen, scientists,
etcetra
 are several other professions that need to be highly paid for their undivided attention and the lives they risk for the betterment of
whole nation
Suggestion
the whole nation
whole nations
.
This
money
atleast
Suggestion
at least
 can free them from the worries they carry for the future of their families. To conclude,
inspite
Suggestion
in spite
 of paying an exorbitant
money
 to the ones in the entertainment field for completing or performing a single task, an
applaudable
 amount of
money
 should be secured in the bank accounts of
ones
Suggestion
the ones
 who are risking their lives and working selflessly for the betterment of all.
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