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earlier technological developments brought more benefits and charged the lives of ordinary people more than recent developments ever will. to what extant do you agree or disagree?

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It's often argued that developing
machinery
 has many positive effects on the citizens' lives and in
this
 way th
eir g
people in general
they
rowth become better than before. I believe that earlier technological developments impact our activity, activities, communication and even our environment and maybe it can be more advantages for ordinary people. During history, human tried to invariant various tools to improve their simple lives.
Thus
, the basic aim of
machinery
 was getting better lifestyle. Recently, technological developments have shown a different face in our heart, especially by internet and electronic gadgets.
Furthermore
, earlier automation lead to enhancement of ordinary person's soul to gain more and it has caused to increased of awareness, access and positive modify of occupations.
In addition
, information explosion is another consequence of
this
 time. They
also
 know more about individual and social freedom.
On the other hand
,
as a result
 of developing
machinery
, people become lazy and board,
also
 they are getting involved a kind of addiction. By
this
 new contraction, keeping privacy getting harder and
also
, organized crime become convenient. In conclusion, developing
machinery
 in the recent period, basically give rise to better heart for human and like everything else has advantages and disadvantages,
however
, in my opinion, automation never stop and continuously develop our ac
tivity.
Suggestion
activities

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