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The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.

The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.
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analysis
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 we will examine two charts. The first one
is headed
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 “reasons why
adults
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 decide to study.” The
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 is “how the costs of each course should be shared.” The first graph shows how the majority of
adults
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 (40%) use
education
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 as a source of interest in a particular subject. About 38% are being educated to gain
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a qualification
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qualification
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 or because they need specific skills for their current job (22%). Another 20% of
adults
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 see
education
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 as a way to improve prospects of promotion. The same percentage of people just enjoy learning or studying.
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, 12% of
adults
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 are engaged by
education
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 as they are able to change jobs
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9% find pleasure in
education
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 as it allows them to meet new people. The pie chart represents an idea of how the money invested in adult
education
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 could be divided between people. A big portion, 40%, should be
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paid
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 by the person who is taking the course.
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35% of the cost should be financed by employers
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 the remaining 25% should be contributed by taxpayers.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words adults, education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage distribution
  • stakeholders
  • pursue further education
  • financial contribution
  • survey results
  • policy implications
  • correlation
  • adult education
  • distribution of costs
  • significant differences
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