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The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first chart shows the
reasons
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 why some
people
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 in the UK prefer to revolve to
task
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the task
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.
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, the
second
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 chart gives
reasons
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 for those who choose to go to
industry
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 by wagon. The highest percentage of those who favour cycling say that
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 is because riding a bicycle to trial is healthier than driving. 30% of them gave
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 as a reason.
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 same amount of
people
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, 30% say that they course of production because it causes less pollution. 13% of
people
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 series of
job
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jobs
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 because it is cheaper than driving. Surprisingly, a similar amount of
people
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 said that they cycled to struggle because it is faster than travelling by van.
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 to
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, the percentage who prefer to travel by machine because it is more comfortable is 40%. The two least important
reasons
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 for going to perform by pickup, with 14% and 11%, respectively,
is
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are
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 that
people
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 need to carry things to endeavour and that it is safer than cycling to the effort.
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, 16% say they prefer driving because it is faster than cycling.
This
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 contrasts with the cyclists who ride to
effort
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the effort
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 because it is faster than driving. In general, it seems that the majority of
people
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who
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 series for production do
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 for health and environmental
reasons
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.
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, those who travel by ride want to have a more comfortable journey over longer distances.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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