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The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first chart shows the
reasons
 why some
people
 in the UK prefer to revolve to
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.
Conversely
, the
second
 chart gives
reasons
 for those who choose to go to
industry
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 by wagon. The highest percentage of those who favour cycling say that
this
 is because riding a bicycle to trial is healthier than driving. 30% of them gave
this
 as a reason.
The
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 same amount of
people
, 30% say that they course of production because it causes less pollution. 13% of
people
 series of
job
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 because it is cheaper than driving. Surprisingly, a similar amount of
people
 said that they cycled to struggle because it is faster than travelling by van.
In contrast
 to
this
, the percentage who prefer to travel by machine because it is more comfortable is 40%. The two least important
reasons
 for going to perform by pickup, with 14% and 11%, respectively,
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 that
people
 need to carry things to endeavour and that it is safer than cycling to the effort.
Finally
, 16% say they prefer driving because it is faster than cycling.
This
 contrasts with the cyclists who ride to
effort
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the effort
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 because it is faster than driving. In general, it seems that the majority of
people
who
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 series for production do
this
 for health and environmental
reasons
.
By contrast
, those who travel by ride want to have a more comfortable journey over longer distances.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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