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Nowadays parents are sending their children to trips abroad for educational purpose. What are the advantages and disadvantages to it.

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Due to globalization & easy access to other countries parents are willing
too
in the direction of
to
 send
there
of them or themselves
their
childran
a young person of either sex
children
 abroad for quality
education
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. Due to
convienent
suited to your comfort or purpose or needs
convenient
 loan options it is easy to pay the fees abroad. There are many universities which offer quality career oriented courses in
compititive
involving competition or competitiveness
competitive
 price. Global
education
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becoms
enter or assume a certain state or condition
becomes
become
 easy in 20th century & more parents are sending
there
of them or themselves
their
 offsprings abroad for better
education
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 and career prospective. Like in India many parents are sending
there
of them or themselves
their
 children to
study
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 in Canada, Australia & USA for higher
education
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. After
compling
the act of encamping and living in tents in a camp
camping
 there
education
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 most of the children settled in the country in which they got there
study
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 completed. It is
eassy
posing no difficulty; requiring little effort
easy
easier
 for them to get a good job abroad because of
relevent
having a bearing on or connection with the subject at issue
relevant
irrelevant
study
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 in that country.
Besides
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 pros there are some cons
also
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. Like culture
diffrence
the quality of being unlike or dissimilar
difference
differences
. Every nation has its own culture & life. It is not easy to migrate to that country & settled
with
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by
 natives easily. Before that everyone has to mould
themselve
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
 to
there
of them or themselves
their
 native culture which is not easy as we thought. So at
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last
the superlative of 'little' that can be used with mass nouns and is usually preceded by 'the'; a quantifier meaning smallest in amount or extent or degree
least
 it is becoming easy to
study
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 abroad day by day. If we consider the pros
then
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 its a good decision for kids to explore the new world &
maake
engage in
make
there
of them or themselves
their
 career
successful
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success
successes
.

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