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Write about the following topic. In the past, most people spent their entire career working for one company, whereas people nowadays move from one job to another. What are the advantages and disadvantages of each? Which do you think is better? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

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There is no doubt that these days employees are trying to look for opportunities in various companies.
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it better to stay in
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 company during your working or to search for others with more benefits? Is being a controvarsial is
sue nowadays.
marked by or capable of arousing controversy
controversial
In
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 essay I am going to examine
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 phenomenon from both view points.
a mental position from which things are viewed
viewpoints
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 side there are people who argue that in past working was less stressful and the lifestyle was more simple.
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result, people
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 company without shiftting to ano
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continuously varying
shifting
sitting
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.There are several benefits for staying in
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:feeling stable,
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tionships with colleagues and improving skills in the same field of
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nowadays and people can not live wit
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cy while I guess employees should feel
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 if they are working at the same place for more than five years.In these case workers are related to h
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hey do not want to think even that
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 good illustration here is the governmental
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 in Kuwait .Workers are fe
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ing happy becasue they hav
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because
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 for y
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 why they refuse to switch their careers.
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ble to consider it with the opposing case.It is often argued that in fact people must think of changing their workplace each 8 years because
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 will allow them to gain more experience and skills and
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 is what happens nowadays.
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relation with feeling saf
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to
work
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 and having good friends so as long as workers change their companies and maintain the healthy envi
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a healthier environment
healthier environment
work
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a black point in the employees profile to keep changing workplaces,while in my opi
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ion restorin
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opinion, restoring
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's mental health and changing places is better than being stressful and not beneficial in a certain place.A good example here is the new Kuwaiti generation who refuse to be stuck to the usual local companies and they look hard to
work
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 in the private sector in order to develop their skills and personality. In conclusion,there is no eas
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answer to
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 question,
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e workers should change their workplace whenever it is required and they have to look for their interests in varios companies
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of many different kinds purposefully arranged but lacking any uniformity
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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