Some people say that travelling to a country is necessary if one wants to become familiar with a new culture. Others, however, feel that technology gives us enough tools to make travel unnecessary.

The necessity of physical global exploration has come to the forefront of
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awareness in
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technological era. Some feel that travel is no longer required to obtain cultural experiences, as the internet provides all.
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, I agree with those who say that journeying to a place is the only method of truly comprehending a foreign lifestyle. In the following paragraphs, I will explore the rationale for both beliefs
as well as
proffer justification for my own viewpoint. Regarding those who hold that technology is enough to learn about foreign cultures, there are many reasons. One supportive claim is that the internet offers endless resources to nearly immerse oneself in any environment. More specifically, an enterprising individual could become completely fluent in another language, by watching subtitled programs on Netflix
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paying a local to converse on Skype. In fact, Stanford published a study in 2017 that found 60% of language learners utilized websites to speak to natives, and these learners indicated a high level of understanding and affinity toward the target culture.
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, I firmly believe that opinion is ludicrous. The obvious reason is that one can never truly understand a foreign context until
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exotic home environment. London is a shining, albeit slightly grubby, example of
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. Not only are the smells of the city unique, from the spicy food stalls to the cloying pubs, but
also
the sounds of the city are unlike any other, with the broad variety of accents and languages present in
this
urban pastiche of the wider world. What is more, none of these aforementioned elements can be truly encountered at one’s desk, in front of a screen. In sum, I maintain that only by physically being present
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another culture can one truly experience a different way of life. In the future, I sincerely wish that more people would turn off their devices and gadgets, and venture out to the world at large.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Firsthand experience
  • Virtual tour
  • Cultural nuances
  • Sustainable travel
  • Empathy
  • International understanding
  • Cuisine
  • Local traditions
  • Global citizen
  • Documentaries
  • Social media interactions
  • Cultural exchange
  • Personal growth
  • Worldview
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