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Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness?

#happiness #life #factors
For most of the people
happiness
 is considered more desirable thing in their personal
life
. Due to the nature of being happy makes it difficult to describe.
Nevertheless
, there are some initial factors which can thought to be crucial in acquiring
happiness
.
However
, to feel happy is
very important feeling
Suggestion
a very important feeling
 of person`s
life
,
this
 very term is one of the most difficult to define and understand for people. I think the main reason for
this
 is that the more people have, the more
happiness
 views have. So that the
happiness
 is relative conception. For one finding enough food for today is
happiness
, but for another
person it
Accept comma addition
person, it
 seems as piece of cake. The practical world is puzzling and the humankind wants more than they have. There are several factors that most people agree with these ways the one`s
life
 can be thought as happy
life
.
Firstly
, it is implausible to happy without
peaceful and safe home
Suggestion
a peaceful and safe home
 and sufficient food
for
Suggestion
to
 live. Not having something, especially
that is
 basic or necessary for
life
 is important in order to lead a pleasant
life
. The
second
 important thing to achieve
happiness
 I think it could only be surrounded by relatives`
wo
the person or persons that; the one that
who
Wu
wow
 is really
love
Suggestion
loving
 and value you. It always motivates you to live and to try to achieve something in your difficult
life
. Some other key factors could be economical freedom, your hobbies, your lovely work and so on. To conclude,
happiness
 is foremost essential part of our
lives
Suggestion
life
 and we feel
this
 emotion by linking it
with
Suggestion
to
 our surrounding states and various stimulating factors.
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