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Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people, while others believe that the purpose of museums is to educate. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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People have differing views regard to the question of how museums should organize their role and function. Should it be for
entertain
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entertaining
 education? In my point of view, museums should be both amusing and educational
place
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places
, in order to attract people as well as children. There are several reasons why people argue about the role of museums. The main aim of a
museums
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museum
 is to collect interesting objects and teach people about history, culture and science. Most of the visitors come to museums in order to learn historical culture and to see objects which seems unusual or exiting or provides information that they did not know about. So that, museums can play an important role in education.
On the other hand
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, museums are
also
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 considered one of
the most attractable
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the most attractive
the most attractively
the most attracting
the most attracted
 places that tourists can enjoy. For that matter, museums should organize their work with the help of games, music and related experiments. Usually some museums can employ professional guides to talk to their visitors or teachers who can explain with different and interesting methods or so. If not, the visitors may become bored because of reading or listening to too much educational information. Museums should be the type of place that people can learn something from history or science with the interactive activities or games. To sum up, in my opinion the view of museums should be both educational and entertaining place that everybody can enjoy as well as learn something.
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