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Some people says that free space in city and town should used to plant trees while some says that construction should be done. Do you agree or disagree?

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Most people
argues
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argue
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the empty spaces in city and town should be
occupy
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occupied
 with
plant
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planting
 trees while others argue that
,
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those places should be filled by constructing a building.I agree to the above statement.In
this
 essay
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am going to discuss it. Most people claim that to plant trees in the free space in city and town.Cities and towns are more polluted than rural areas.
For example
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cultivating a tree can regulate more than half percent of the population.To reside in urban areas
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people find more difficult.Innovate new ideas like planting trees
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so
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this
 will ensure more knowledge of the value of growing
hebal
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herb
herbal
 plants.The atmosphere shows a pleasant attraction
to
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for
 the viewers.In the highways, plants are grown in the centre of the two subways
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it is to control the pollution
emit
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emitted
emission
emissions
emitters
 by the vehicles.According to science
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plants produce
oxygen so
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oxygen, so
 it is very essential to us to survive.Encourage the society to grow plants for better rainfall and good atmospheric conditions.It provides shelter to many of them. Categorically speaking
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 others argue
instead
 of planting trees those places should be filled by constructing a building.According to them
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rather than showing affection towards the environment but to increase the economy
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lifestyles and standard of living.
For example
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people live in urban areas reside in hotels
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villas and many others.Increase in employment
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seek the people to live in those areas.The
socio economic
involving social as well as economic factors
socioeconomic
 status will improve a lot.Industries are common for
production
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producing
 and consuming.It is very essential to construct a building. To conclude
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most people argue that empty space in cities
should be occupy
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should occupy
 with
trees but
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trees, but
 others to construct
building
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the building
buildings
a building
.But in my
opinion it
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opinion, it
 is necessary to plant trees to overcome with pollution and many others.
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