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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

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Its
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It
 is a
deabatable
open to doubt or debate
debatable
 issue
,
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,
people buying
behvaiour
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
has suddenly change
Suggestion
have suddenly changed
 under the influence of eye
catch
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catching
 advertisements.Companies
has
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have
 only one motto to sell their products so they
hire celebarties
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hire, celebrities
hire celebrities
 or
roles
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role
 models to advertise
thir
of them or themselves
their
 products.Which
generally effect
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generally affects
generally affect
 the people buying behaviour.I
stronlgy
with strength or in a strong manner
strongly
 believe that
consumer
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the consumer
a consumer
consumers
buy
Suggestion
buys
 those things
,
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,
which they are not really need.
Fistly
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Firstly
,
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,
the all the companies want to sell their products like "hot cakes".They always tried to sell their
beound
farther along in space or time or degree
beyond
bonds
 their limits.They always hire crickets or famous person
.
Accept space
.
Who can help enhance their selling level.
For
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example for
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example, of
example of
 beauty products advertise through the
beautyifull
delighting the senses or exciting intellectual or emotional admiration
beautiful
beautifully
bountiful
 girls and give a false opinion to
glow
Suggestion
glowing
 skin
with in
internal to, not outside; located in the bounds of
within
 a week.People get influence they buy if they really need or not.
Secondly
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,
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,
these advertisements give birth to rate
rac
any competition
race
.Where
people speacillay
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people, especially
people especially
midddle
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
middle
 class
want
Suggestion
wants
 to look more stylish and
richa
possessing material wealth
rich
rice
Rice
 as
comapre
examine and note the similarities or differences of
compare
 to the other people.Under
this
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 intention they
coantinully
seemingly without interruption
continually
 spend money on wanted things.
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