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Some people think that having a set retirement age for everybody regardless is unfair.They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at easy age.Do you agree or disagree. Which type of workers do you think should be benefit for early retirement. Give reason and example.

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In
this
 era, employees, gives a huge part of their life serve to their companies.Retirement is that time when, he or she gets a break from their work and eligible for their pensions which they can get from their companies.Some people believe that the age of retirements should not to be fixed, it should depend on the type of effort. I agree with
this
 argument because in some field people are doing
hard job
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hard jobs
a hard job
.I will indicate my views in following paragraphs. At the outset, there are existing numerous forces which drive my agreement with
this
 statement, but the most conspicuous one stem from the fact is physical strength and stamina.In some field,
for example
, those are working in
office
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the office
 they are doing less physical activities as compared to other field
such
 as coal mine, construction, etc., people are working hard
,
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,
they reduced their physical strength and stamina as they are growing old.
Additionally
, some people those are working far away from their families
,
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,
they need early retirements because they spend less time with their kids and other family members.
In other words
,
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,
they are not enjoying kids' childhood and they get a distance with their relationship.
For
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To
 illustrate, my brother, was working for a company named '
Coasta
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Coast an
Coast a
' in Australia and his family was living in China. He came back after 10 years to his hometown China.Now
,
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,
children grew up
,
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,
now they are busy with their studies and jobs
,
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,
they do not have time to spend with their father. In conclusion
,
Accept space
,
I think that those people are doing physical hard
wor
activity directed toward making or doing something
work
, living abroad, military service extra, they should have to get an early retirement and get a pension from their companies and government because they spent their precious life for that service.

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