Some people think that having a set retirement age for everybody regardless is unfair.They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at easy age.Do you agree or disagree. Which type of workers do you think should be benefit for early retirement. Give reason and example.

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era, employees, gives a huge part of their life serve to their companies.Retirement is that time when, he or she gets a break from their work and eligible for their pensions which they can get from their companies.Some people believe that the age of retirements should not to be fixed, it should depend on the type of effort. I agree with

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Some people think that having a set retirement age for everybody regardless is unfair.They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at easy age.Do you agree or disagree. Which type of workers do you think should be benefit for early retirement. Give reason and example.

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some children spend hours every on smartphones. Why is this case? Is it a positive or negative development?

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Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change.