In some areas of the US a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompained by an adult.What is your opinion about this?

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In certain parts of
United States
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the United States
, due to curfew teenagers cannot go out after a particular hour of the night without supervision of an adult. In my opinion,
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as adolescents are too young to keep themselves safe and secure all the times. To embark with, keeping teenagers confined to their homes during wee hours is beneficial for them. If they go out during night, they may get in contact with criminals and drug
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Most of the time drug mafia
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targets
new customers to deliver their products from one place to another by providing them
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an ample amount
of money. While dong these kind of detrimental activities they find it
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a good way
to earn more in less time.As they are not aware about its repercussions.
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, in Uttar Pradesh there are
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Most of them are not even aware about the crime that they committed. To curb
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menace, in US government is taking initiatives to save youth. On
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if teenagers are accompanied by an adult, there are less chances of criminals to approach them.
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protects children from evil eyes.
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The adolescent
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age in which teenagers do not have knowledge about their good and bad.
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, parents or guardians who are with their children come to know about their activities and can warm them when they cross their limits. To conclude along with my
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opinion, this
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curfew prevents teens from going out of their home late at night save them from getting indulged in to wrong activities. Since teens are too young to think about wrong and right, they need care and full attention of adults.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enforce
  • juvenile
  • repercussions
  • autonomy
  • adolescence
  • paternalistic
  • delinquency
  • municipality
  • ordinance
  • authoritarian
  • peer pressure
  • social dynamics
  • civil liberties
  • community policing
  • preventative measures
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