In many societies in the world, the population is ageing rapidly and this is leading to an unsustainable increase in the cost of public healthcare. A nation’s population should pay for their healthcare provision in the future. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Advances in medical science are resulting in prolonged lifespans but there is a knock-on effect
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public
health
services with many hospitals struggling to cope with an
aging
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populace. Many countries enjoy the benefits of free or subsidised national public
health
services.
However
, there are some within senior
health
management who claim that
such
provision will become unsustainable, and I firmly agree that changes need to be made in order to reflect
this
changing reality. Despite the notion that
healthcare
should be ‘free’,
such
care is predominantly funded by the taxpayer. To give a specific example, a recent report in my country established that almost 40% of the nation’s tax spending is distributed to
healthcare
and some 80% of that figure is reserved for treating the elderly.
This
is a disproportionate amount of money which has greatly increased the burden on the state and existing funding is no longer sufficient to meet these needs.
This
is
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the standard of care that can be provided as shown by numerous negative media reports about the conditions
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both staff and patients. If we want quality
healthcare
then
, clearly
this
financial burden needs to be alleviated. One way to do so would be to increase the contributions made by citizens through increased taxation.
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governments could encourage those who can afford it to take up private
healthcare
arrangements. By switching to a private model, the well-off can afford a higher quality of care,
while
at the same relieving pressure on public services for those who do not have the means to go private. One thing is for certain, an ageing population has increased the pressure on existing
health
provision. If we are going to maintain the standards of
healthcare
that we are used to, more funding needs to be found either through taxation
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alternative forms of provision should be considered.
Otherwise
, standards will fall and people’s lives will be put at risk.
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