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Some people believe they should keep all the money they have earned and should not pay tax to the state. Do you agree or disagree

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It is argued that all
money
 which have earned should not be paid levy to the government.
However
, I totally disagree because of altering
money
 and making great strides for state
.
Suggestion
the state
 I maintain that all
money
 should not be kept because of reworking
money
.
For example
, salaries are given according to budge
t which is a
Suggestion
the budget, which
the budget which
a budget which
ccumulated from the
tax
.
This
 is due to the fact that government is unable to foster its workers with enough
money
 without
tax
. Here it should
also
 be stated that if people had not paid any
tax
, our budget might have terin
ated.
having come or been brought to a conclusion
terminated
Furthermore
, I believe that keeping
money
 without
tax
 deprives of making great strides.
For instance
, sum o
f
Suggestion
a sum
the sum
money
 which is taken from
tax
 utilizes for furnishing. The reason is that amant
ies are
things that make you comfortable and at ease
amenities
done by compiling
money
. If there is not enough, the government can n
ot endu
can not
cannot
re to pay salary on time. It is
therefore
 people should not keep all
money
. To sum up, thede
are
plural of "this"
these
the main reasons why I disagree keeping all
money
. Sum of
money
 is shared for altering
money
 and making strides for our country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contribute
  • welfare
  • public services
  • progressive taxation
  • distribution of wealth
  • civic duty
  • social cohesion
  • tax evasion
  • economic disparities
  • social unrest
  • individual rights
  • societal responsibilities
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