You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
Both figures illustrate the UK's
last
year
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year's
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crime
information.
Line
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The line
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graph describes the
relation
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relationship
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between
crime
and
age
,
whereas
pie
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the pie
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chart
demonstrate
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demonstrates
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the percentage of
crimes
.
To begin
with a line graph,
it
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apply
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deals the
crime
with ages between 0-60. The
age
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aged
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below 8 are often children never committed to
crime
.
Crime
starts at the
age
of 12 and rose up to 80 thousand
for
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over
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20
year
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years
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old
age
.
However
, it started declining after
age
20. But
still
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,still
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some of the
crimes
are committed till
age
60.
Next
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The next
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pie chart diagram highlights the types of
crimes
in percentage. There are total
4
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of 4
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types of
crime
are involved.
Firstly
, violent
crime
has 46 % and it is the most committed
crime
.
Secondly
,
property
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the property
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has 23%.
Moreover
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,Moreover
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property
crime
is almost half
of
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apply
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violent. Following that, drug and public order
has
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have
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22% and 9%.
Overall
, Drug and public order
crimes
are nowhere near as much committed
crime
as
violent
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violence
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and property. The most
crime
committed
age
for
crime
is between 12-28.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, age, crimes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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