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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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Both figures illustrate the UK's
last
year
Change noun form
year's
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crime
 information.
Line
Correct article usage
The line
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 graph describes the
relation
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relationship
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 between
crime
 and
age
,
whereas
pie
Correct article usage
the pie
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 chart
demonstrate
Change the verb form
demonstrates
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 the percentage of
crimes
.
To begin
 with a line graph,
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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deals the
crime
 with ages between 0-60. The
age
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aged
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 below 8 are often children never committed to
crime
.
Crime
 starts at the
age
 of 12 and rose up to 80 thousand
for
Change preposition
over
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 20
year
Fix the agreement mistake
years
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 old
age
.
However
, it started declining after
age
 20. But
still
Add a comma
,still
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 some of the
crimes
 are committed till
age
 60.
Next
Correct article usage
The next
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 pie chart diagram highlights the types of
crimes
 in percentage. There are total
4
Change preposition
of 4
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types of
crime
 are involved.
Firstly
, violent
crime
 has 46 % and it is the most committed
crime
.
Secondly
,
property
Add an article
the property
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 has 23%.
Moreover
Add a comma
,Moreover
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 property
crime
 is almost half
of
Change preposition
apply
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violent. Following that, drug and public order
has
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have
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 22% and 9%.
Overall
, Drug and public order
crimes
 are nowhere near as much committed
crime
 as
violent
Replace the word
violence
show examples
 and property. The most
crime
 committed
age
 for
crime
 is between 12-28.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, age, crimes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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