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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Both figures illustrate the UK's
last
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year
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year's
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crime
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 information.
Line
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The line
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 graph describes the
relation
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relationship
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 between
crime
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 and
age
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,
whereas
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pie
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the pie
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 chart
demonstrate
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demonstrates
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 the percentage of
crimes
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.
To begin
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 with a line graph,
it
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apply
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deals the
crime
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 with ages between 0-60. The
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age
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aged
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 below 8 are often children never committed to
crime
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.
Crime
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 starts at the
age
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 of 12 and rose up to 80 thousand
for
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over
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 20
year
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years
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 old
age
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.
However
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, it started declining after
age
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 20. But
still
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,still
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 some of the
crimes
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 are committed till
age
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 60.
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Next
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The next
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 pie chart diagram highlights the types of
crimes
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 in percentage. There are total
4
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of 4
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types of
crime
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 are involved.
Firstly
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, violent
crime
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 has 46 % and it is the most committed
crime
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.
Secondly
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,
property
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the property
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 has 23%.
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Moreover
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,Moreover
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 property
crime
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 is almost half
of
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apply
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violent. Following that, drug and public order
has
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have
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 22% and 9%.
Overall
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, Drug and public order
crimes
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 are nowhere near as much committed
crime
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 as
violent
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violence
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 and property. The most
crime
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 committed
age
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 for
crime
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 is between 12-28.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, age, crimes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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