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The chart illustrates the consumption of fruit and vegetables amongst men, women and children in a day for seven years from 2001 to 2008.

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, the consumptions of women in all years were the highest, followed by men and children. The intake of fruit and vegetables for women from 22% of people in 2001 increased from 5 years up to 2006 reaching more than 30%.

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shows a decline.

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same token, men

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consumed

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17% of the people in 2001

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and continued

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till 2003 and shows increments till 2006 with more than 27%,

same

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the same

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also

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in 2007 and declined by 1 or 2%

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afterward

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Children

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consumption

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showed 12% in 2001 with

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till 2003 and increased in 2004 by 5% to 17% and

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growth till 2007 to 25%.

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, the growth shows

decline

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a decline

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in 2008 to 24%.

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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

143 words

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The bar chart below shows the percentage of people

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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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