The bar chart below shows the percentage of people
The chart illustrates the consumption of fruit and vegetables amongst men, women and children in a day for seven years from 2001 to 2008.
Overall
, the consumptions of women in all years were the highest, followed by men and children.
The intake of fruit and vegetables for women from 22% of people in 2001 increased from 5 years up to 2006 reaching more than 30%. Then
shows a decline. The
same token, men Change preposition
At the
also
consumed a
17% of the people in 2001 Correct article usage
apply
continued
till 2003 and shows increments till 2006 with more than 27%, Correct word choice
and continued
same
Correct article usage
the same
also
in 2007 and declined by 1 or 2% then
afterward
.
Change the spelling
afterwards
Children
consumption Change noun form
Children's
also
showed 12% in 2001 with same
rate Change the article
the same
goes
till 2003 and increased in 2004 by 5% to 17% and Wrong verb form
going
continue
growth till 2007 to 25%. Replace the word
continued
Finally
, the growth shows decline
in 2008 to 24%.Add an article
a decline
the decline
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