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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree and disagree with this statement?

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It's
 quite realistic when someone living in
foreign country
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a foreign country
 and have to speak the local
language
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 of that country is difficult. Many students or immigrants travel to other countries where English is the
second
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language
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 spoken and for them it is challenging. As per my
opinion I
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opinion, I
 definitely agree
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with
 the statement that due to the
language
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 which is unknown and alien to us will face problem in both social and practical terms. Most of the countries like Germany, Netherlands, France etc.
have
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Have
 their own
language
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. Usually when people travel
abroad they
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abroad, they
 have problems while communicating to local people specially drivers while commuting or in stores. For an instance my friend moved to Germany for his masters and after he landed off the plane he needed to catch the metro to get to the place where he had booked the room. When he went to the station and heard the announcement he was panicked as they were announcing in German
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 which he did not
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understand
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 he had to ask others to catch the correct train. Another
example which
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example, which
 I would like to share is that, back in 2015 I visited a village in Andhra Pradesh called Nizamabaad to an orphanage. There we were to told to volunteer. As their local speaking is Telegu we were not able to communicate with
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them, hence
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 we asked for a translator who could help us to guide the crowd. My recommendation would be whenever we visit some place or countries where we do not know that
language
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 at-least we can get some idea about that place or we can learn some basics so that we can understand and communicate.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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