Some people say that school children should learn how to grow food and cook with it in their lessons. What is your opinion about that?

Food is one of
basic requirement
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the basic requirement
basic requirements
for survival. Certain individual tell that
school
teenagers must acquire knowledge related to growing and as well cooking in their subjects. I disagree with the notion because it is irrelevant and it is
additional burden
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an additional burden
.
To begin
with, Parent who
are proposing
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is proposing
lesson
related to cultivating and growing food for children is not required because there are other important general
subject
in the
school
curriculum, Most
subject
in
school
are related to literature, Mathematics, Science and social. Already
this
lesson
are
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was
is
indispensable and
this
cooking proposed
subject
can be learn
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can be learned
can be learnt
after completion of
school
.
for
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For
instance, UK Curriculum has
wide range
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a wide range
of
subject
and 95% of students are already facing
problem
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problems
a problem
in completing their task.
Furthermore
, the other reason for refusal for cooking
subject
in
school
is because it is extra pressure on children. Already regular
lesson
need
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needed
needs
sufficient time for children to complete it and by including
this
new
subject
will add
on
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to
pressure on them. Food is essential for
living but
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living, but
it is not essential to acquire information in depth from
initial stages
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the initial stages
of cultivation and final stage of preparing in
kitchen
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the kitchen
. Latter when children excel in their regular syllabus they can think
of
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about
specializing in their interest field. But now forcing them will hinder in other studies.
for
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For
example, As per recent studies it is concluded that most children are hospitalized due to excess of pressure from regular studies. In conclusion, Irrelevance and over burdening are two main
reason
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reasons
for my disagreement for including growing and cooking
lesson
in the
school
subject
. Children when they complete their elementary
school
and pass out with excellent
grades
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grades, then
then
they are free to decide their career and take on agriculture
subject
or hotel management to learn in depth.
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