The movement of people from agricultural areas to cities to work can cause serious problems in both places. What are the serious problems and what measures can be taken to solve this problem.

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Many

people

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, these days, are migrating from

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rural

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urban settings for better work opportunities.

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transition can become an underlying cause of major issues for both

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places.

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essay will discuss those problems and will propose measures to ameliorate the situation. First and foremost, owing to the increasing number of

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moving towards

mega cities

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, the pressure on basic amenities,

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water, clean air to

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and accommodation is dramatically increasing.

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, the living standard of the cities is decreasing. For instance, Mumbai

city

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in India welcomes around 1 million

people

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each year, and as the living grounds and water supply is limited in the

city

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, slum

areas

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have grown there and water scarcity is one of the major problems in the

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, as

people

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are ambitious these days and moving towards metropolitan

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, the growth of

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urban

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has come to a halt. As the government mostly neglects the

areas

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where only a handful of

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dwell,

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places have been deprived of development. To solve

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issues, the government should put more emphasis on developing

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agricultural

areas

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. They should focus on generating better job opportunities in

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areas

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so that

people

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should

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not be willing to move out in search of

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life.

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, the government should

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set a threshold on the number of

people

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entering a

city

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according to

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the resources available there.

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, Canada has started a program to promote settlement in suburban

areas

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so that Ontario province can become less populated. In conclusion, as more individuals are moving from agricultural

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to big cities, the load on natural resources is increasing and the development of rural

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is not being done. But these problems are not insurmountable

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and can be tackled if the authorities start taking

initiatives

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and take

above mentioned

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measures.

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Ensure that all ideas directly relate to the prompt and maintain a clear focus on the topic throughout the essay.

coherence and cohesion

Use a wider variety of linking words and cohesive devices to improve the overall coherence and cohesion of the essay.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

Introduction
Body paragraph 1 – Problems
Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
Conclusion

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One of the first problems of the...
Another problem that needs to be considered...
A possible solution to this problem would be...
One immediate practical solution is to...

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

309 words

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The movement of people from agricultural areas to cities to work can cause serious problems in both places. What are the serious problems and what measures can be taken to solve this problem.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

You are going to visit the town where your friend went to university. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: • explain why you will be visiting the town • give details of where you will be staying • ask your friend to recommend some evening entertainment.

Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how?

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.