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creative artists should always be given the freedom express their own ideas (in word, pictures, music or film) in whichever way they wish. there should be no government restrictions on what they do. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#artists #freedom #word #pictures #music #film #government #restrictions
Today in any country of the world, people have any favorite artists
or musi
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
cians. These people we know as creative people. Some people believe, that need not to limit creative potential these artists. Another people b
elieve
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the government should control the creation process
. I agre
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creative
e with
this
 opinion and in
this
 essay will be give my point of
vie
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given
w with appropriate examples to support my own opinion. I think that art, which made for audience can aff
ects esp
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an audience
the audience
ecially strong on teenagers. For them the art has psychological ef
fect. Very important
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a psychological effect
 to make films kind and beautiful. Need to ban films with bad contents. Today system works
this
 way that all the films are divided for age eighteen “+” or for all.
For example
, there is a film which provoked more suicides. Another fact in support
this
 opinion that the teenagers choose the stars themselves. Children have not experience of li
fe and the
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the experience
y do not where lie
and t
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do, not
he true. They j
ust beli
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the truth
eve their idols. No everyone singers
wish to enjoy o
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everyone, singers
f music.
There were inc
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enjoy music
idents when a singer called for alcohol, cigarettes and even drugs in his sings.
a short musical composition with words
songs
sayings
 But control from the governm
ent
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of
have to use carefully and they should not limit positive creative.
Otherw
ise, we
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creativity
would not enjoy different kinds of “Romeo and Juliet”. In conclusion takin
g to attention po
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conclusion, taking
s
it
being one more than one
two
ive sides I will say that the government should control the art. Because a future our society depends on our children.
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