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from the

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1900 to 2000

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with the regional proportional values in percentage.

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, the populace has

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significantly increased all over the world

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of the period.

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, the regional number in

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is 1.6billion at 2000 it reached to 6billion. In the

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1900

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populace is below 2

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and it slightly increased in 1920

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it drops down in 1930 to 1

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people.

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, the

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is not stable and

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under

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though it has fluctuations until 1970. After that, the populace gradually increased to 6

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in the period 2000.

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looking for more details, In 1900, Asia and Europe had 60% and 25% of the world's

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to other countries, but both

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decreased by 6% and 9% in 2000. Latin America and Africa had a little growth in 2000 to 8% and 10% compared to 1900 to 3% and 4%.

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, North America and other remains same in both the period with 5% and 3%. Middle East and North Africa were added in the

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2000 with

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of 6%.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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