In Britain when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. sometimes the government have to pay for this care. who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family?

old
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Old
age
is the best stage of life and people need good
care
at
this
age
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britain
a monarchy in northwestern Europe occupying most of the British Isles; divided into England and Scotland and Wales and Northern Ireland; 'Great Britain' is often used loosely to refer to the United Kingdom
Britain
myraids
too numerous to be counted
myriads
of people go to live in
a
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an
aboad
any address at which you dwell more than temporarily
abode
with same
age
people
.
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.
most
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Most
of the time bureaucrat
pay
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pays
money
for
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to
take
care
of
elder
advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)
older
people but
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people, but
as per my perspective family is responsible for
care
care
of their parents and elder people
.
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.
In
this
essay we would elucidate the my opinion with some apt epitome. There are
myraids
too numerous to be counted
myriads
of reason behind
this
phenomenon that why family is responsible for their parents and elder people
.
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.
first
preceding all others in time or space or degree
First
and foremost reason is that
its
it is
it's
our culture
,
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,
we
learnt
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have learned
have learnt
since childhood that parents play a very crucial role in our
life
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lives
and provide us a better lifestyle or career
.
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.
Thus
, it is
responsibility
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the responsibility
of children to look their parents
at
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in
their old
age
.
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.
Secondly
,
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,
bureaucrat
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the bureaucrat
a bureaucrat
is already provide
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is already providing
has already provided
is already provided
already provides
a
lots
Suggestion
lot
of facility to us
such
as free medical
facitity
a building or place that provides a particular service or is used for a particular industry
facility
in hospitals
,
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,
free education or many more
.
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.
Therfore
Suggestion
Therefore
,
government
Suggestion
the government
has not too much fund to pay money for elder
peole
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
. Futhermore
,
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,
if
government
provides
this
kind of
services
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services, then
then
defenetly
without question and beyond doubt
definitely
it has
determenental imapct
Suggestion
a detrimental impact
determenental impact
detrimental impact
detrimental imapct
on our lifestyle and future as they increase tax and
price
Suggestion
the price
of everything
.
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.
Last
but not least
,
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,
government
provide
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provides
the services
such
as pension to senior citizen so it is
little bit
Suggestion
a little bit
difficult for
government
to manage lots of
fund
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funds
.
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.
To
substanitate
establish or strengthen as with new evidence or facts
substantiate
, my state of
mind i
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mind, I
mind I
would like to quote an epitome
such
as
last
year I visited
United Kingdom
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the United Kingdom
bcz
my alter ego invite me so
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
visit their that mostly parents live
alone they
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alone, they
do not like to live with their parents, and
,
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,
for
this
bureaucrats
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bureaucrat
pay a
monthy
of or occurring or payable every month
monthly
month
pension to the people.After knowing
this
I was very surprised.
Hamering
Suggestion
Hammering
the
last
nail
,
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
would like to infer that it should be the duty of the family and children to provide
better facility
Suggestion
better facilities
a better facility
and home to their parents
.
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.
Our
government
have
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had
has
already lots of
project
Suggestion
projects
to hone the economy of the country
.
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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