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The graph below shows relative price changes for fresh fruits and vegetables, sugars and sweets, and carbonated drinks between 1978 and 2009.

The graph below shows relative price changes for fresh fruits and vegetables, sugars and sweets, and carbonated drinks between 1978 and 2009.
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information about the cost changing of different consumable products, including fruits and vegetables, sugar and sweets,
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price
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 index, and carbonated drink from 1978 to 2009. The general overview here is that prices in all categories had increased,
while
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 fresh fruits and vegetables became the most expensive among the other.
on the other hand
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, the
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 of soft
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 slowly grew up over 30 years.
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 the data, every kind of product had changed in
price
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 in positive ways for a producer.
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, fruits and vegetables before it became around 330 in 2009,
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used to
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 50 at the beginning of the given period.
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, carbonated drinks had slightly changed in cost. Over 30 years old, Its
price
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 was approximately 100 higher than at the start. For the rest, they both had
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 in trend. Their
price
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 had risen gradually.
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 their pattern was in the same way, the consumer-
price
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 index was a little bit higher than sugar and sweets
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