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The graph below shows relative price changes for fresh fruits and vegetables, sugars and sweets, and carbonated drinks between 1978 and 2009.

The graph below shows relative price changes for fresh fruits and vegetables, sugars and sweets, and carbonated drinks between 1978 and 2009.
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The given line graph represents
the
Correct article usage
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information about the cost changing of different consumable products, including fruits and vegetables, sugar and sweets,
consumer-
Add an article
the consumer-price

The noun phrase consumer-price index seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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price
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 index, and carbonated drink from 1978 to 2009. The general overview here is that prices in all categories had increased,
while
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 fresh fruits and vegetables became the most expensive among the other.
on the other hand
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, the
price
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 of soft
drink
Fix the agreement mistake
drinks

It seems that drink may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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 slowly grew up over 30 years.
According to
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 the data, every kind of product had changed in
price
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 in positive ways for a producer.
For instance
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, fruits and vegetables before it became around 330 in 2009,
it
Correct pronoun usage
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used to
only
Add a missing verb
be only

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 50 at the beginning of the given period.
On the contrary
Linking Words

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, carbonated drinks had slightly changed in cost. Over 30 years old, Its
price
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 was approximately 100 higher than at the start. For the rest, they both had
similarity
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similarities

It seems that similarity may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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 in trend. Their
price
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 had risen gradually.
Although
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 their pattern was in the same way, the consumer-
price
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 index was a little bit higher than sugar and sweets

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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