it is often said that governments spend too much money on projects to protect wildlife,while there are other problems that are more important? do you agree or disagree?

some
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Some
people believe that more than half of
government's budget
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the government's budget
are spent on protecting the life of animals
instead
of major problems.
This
essay agrees that two
third
of governments fund are spent on wildlife
protection leaving
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protection, leaving
important issues unattended with reasons.
Firstly
,
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,
it is true that animals are beneficial to humans but
education
as one of the important issues has been neglected.
This
is because
education
when given to our younger generation will be of a great benefit to the country, has been given less or no attention and the money which is supposed to be used in building schools with international facilities has been
chennelled
a path over which electrical signals can pass
channelled
channeled
to
renovating
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renovate
old and building of new zoos.
For instance
,
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,
2019 budget analysis shows that only 5% of the capital expenditure are allocated to
education
.And
this
has made most of the citizens to think that
government
has failed in their responsibility.
In addition
,
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,
wildlife is good to be funded by the
government but
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government, but
health is of great
important
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importance
.Funds that should have been used to build hospitals with modern facilities are now channelled to the maintenance of
game reserve
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the game reserve
to the detriment of the people.
This
means that for one to access good
healthcare
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health care
,
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,
you must be ready to travel abroad and because not everybody can afford to fly their sick relatives overseas
,
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,
they have resorted to herbal treatment
,
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,
which in the end lead to death. In conclusion
,
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,
budgeting a reasonable amount of money to wildlife is
good but
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good, but
I think that issues like
education
and health sector should be given major parts of the
government
money as it is essential human parts of life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecological balance
  • safeguard
  • natural habitats
  • foster
  • cultural of conservation
  • long-term ecological sustainability
  • economic benefits
  • significant source of revenue
  • investment
  • nation’s economic wealth
  • preservation of ecosystems
  • clean water and air
  • prioritization
  • multi-faceted government budgets
  • environmental protection
  • wildlife conservation
  • neglecting
  • detrimental effects
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