In order to Spend a quality life, some say, people need to have more money and some say people need free time. What do you think is important. What are the other things which are required to have a quality life?

It is a controversial topic
,
Accept space
,
that a set of people say, money is required to spend a
quality
life
,
however
the rest say, free
time
is more crucial. As per my understanding, I believe, not only the sound financial backing and leisure
time
, but
also
the moral values and attitudes are
also
crucial. It is a known fact that a person who possesses a plentiful money can experience a luxurious
life
,
buy
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buys
braded items and accessories, eat gourmet meals, tour around the world and
etc
the thing named or in question
it
its
eats
, which will channel to a
quality
life
.
one
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One
of my friends who is a millionaire
,
Accept space
,
has been travelling around the world, since he left the college, as he is the owner of his father’s business at present.
Eventhough
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Even though
the person is wealthy, if he/she does not have sufficient
time
to feel the nature, follow hobbies one enjoys, and spend
time
with their loved once, a limited aspects can be
experiences
Suggestion
experienced
with a lump sum of money.
Moreover
, abundant level of
time
can be utilized in different aspects
such
as hiking,
trecking
a journey by ox wagon (especially an organized migration by a group of settlers)
trekking
, helping people in need, uplifting the community and
etc
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
,
hence
these will enhance the mental
fitness and as well
Suggestion
and fitness as well
as physical fitness,
consequntly
(sentence connectors) because of the reason given
consequently
lead to a
quality
life
. As a conclusion, I would say, it is equally important for a man to be
commecialy
in a commercial manner
commercially
comically
chemically
fit and having ample amount of
time
to spend with their kith and kin, aspire a challenging task, buy an expensive house, and eat delicious food,
however
one needs to pay
atention
Suggestion
attention
to the moral principles and good
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
which can lead to the ultimate happiness and
quality
life
.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial resources
  • Life satisfaction
  • Mental health
  • Free time
  • Work-life balance
  • Excessive
  • Imbalances
  • Quality of life
  • Healthcare
  • Recreational activities
  • Social connections
  • Community bonds
  • Personal fulfillment
  • Sense of purpose
  • Financial stability
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