Some people think it is better for children to grown up in the city, while others think that life in the countryside is more suitable for them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both places?
It is debatable
that
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whether
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the better
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the upbringing
kids
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into
benefits
and drawbacks in the following paragraphs.
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the benefits
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with, the main advantage of the look after Linking Words
of
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apply
children
in town is that they can Use synonyms
take
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be
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admitted
well reputed
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well-reputed
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the teacher
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kids
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school
.
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schools
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, the main disadvantage of urban upbringing is that both Linking Words
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Children
live alone at home. They are unaware Use synonyms
how
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of how
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are accompanied
bad
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the bad
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rather than
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parents
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children
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feels
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feel
the
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apply
about
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children
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free
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are free
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Rose Park
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to
the
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apply
lake
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level
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levels
people
come and Use synonyms
kids
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attract
when they see their activities.
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are attracted
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, the chief benefit of rural nurturing of Linking Words
children
is that they live in a joint family, even if Use synonyms
parents
are busy. Use synonyms
Then
care of them can be taken by grandparents. Linking Words
Also
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apply
to
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grandkids
kids
many good things. Take Use synonyms
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people
do not earn enough money because of unemployment and they cannot send their Use synonyms
kids
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in
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they
face unemployment problems.
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up they
Although
there are some problems in rural areas, Linking Words
yet
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apply
kids
can get Use synonyms
better
upbringing in cities than Correct article usage
a better
villages
, because in towns they meet Change preposition
in villages
with
different Change preposition
apply
kind
of Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
people
and improve their knowledge Use synonyms
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also
, boost their confidence and communication skills. Which are necessary in Correct word choice
and also
competitive
era.Correct article usage
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