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There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making global temperatures higher. What might be the man-made causes of temperatures rising? How should we deal with this problem?

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It is often thought that activities done by people in da
ily basis lead t
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the daily basis lead
o
temperature
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 rise each year. In my op
inion I t
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opinion, I
otally agree that people harm
earth
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 in many different wa
ys among t
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ways, among
hem is making the climate a lot hotter.
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wever some c
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However, some
harity groups work to make these disadvantages less and make
earth
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 a better place to live in. In
this
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 essay I will take about different causes of rise in
temperature
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 and how can people treat them. In our normal daily ro
utine we a
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routine, we
s humans affect the
temperature
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 of the
earth
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 by air po
llution which c
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pollution, which
omes from vehicles, factories and all sort types of air pollution. The gases that come from these places are very toxic
such
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 as carbon monoxide and nitrogen dioxide that can
also
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 risk our
life
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 and there are some reported death cases. Since all these gasses are present in our
life
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 and increase tremendously day by day, global warming will take place. Global warming is the rise of the
temperature
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 of
earth
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 oceans and atmosphere. Once the
temperature
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 rises up, ice caps will melt enormously so sea level will boost up and increase. Many people believe that we can fix our most dangerous
earth
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 problem and lower the
temperature
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 just by following simple factors. Just by planting many fo
rest ,
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forests
c
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,
arbon dioxide will get lost. We
also
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 should start to use renewable resources and particularly the renewable energy resources for homes and schools etc. To sum up we have the ability to change these bad habits and live a better
life
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. Everyone shall encourage their friends and family, to have a better more secure
life
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.

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