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Nowadays there is a rapid increase of rubbish amounts all arounf the world . What are the causes and solutions of this problem .

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Irrefutably
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 it is certainly true that in present days our nation is facing
plethora
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a plethora
 of problems due to polluted environment
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 The
amount
 of rubbish is one of them
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 Which is increasing at
alarming rate
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an alarming rate
 and
this
 problem is
also
 burning question of the day
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Therefore
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this
 essay will shed light not only its
causes but
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causes, but
also
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on
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suitable
 solutions in
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the upcoming paragraphs
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a doubt
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,
 the
amount
 of waste which we produce has been increased
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The fundamental reason of
this
 problem is our customer culture
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 People are continuously purchasing abundance of new products
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 Which leads to rubbish in society because when something
breaks
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breaks, then
then
 we throw it away and buy new one
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Moreover everyday
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Moreover, everyday
 people come across numerous advertisements which attract them
yowards
near
towards
 itself
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 Packaging is
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an imperative part
imperative part
iterative part
 of selling. So companies are doing extra packaging for
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making
them
of them or themselves
their
 products attractive which help them to earn
lucrative
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a lucrative amount
amount
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 Apart from that
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in 21st
century mostly
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century, mostly
 folks ate addicted to eat junk food and undoubtedly,
most of food is
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most food is
 sold in non biodegradable plastic packaging
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 All in
all the
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all, the
amount
 of household waste is growing. There are tremendous ways which will help to prevent
this
derious
concerned with work or important matters rather than play or trivialities
serious
 menace
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Firstly
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regime
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the regime
 should spread knowledge among
publicc
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the public
public
 through seminars
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lectures and advertisements. Apart from that
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they should provide dustbins in every locality free of cost as well as they should teach public about 3R schemes
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Moreover companies
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Moreover, companies
 should make
last
 longer goods which
will helps
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will help
 to reduce the extra buying habits of individuals as well as government should be stricter about those industries which produce waste and put
legal limit
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legal limits
a legal limit
 on packaging
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 In accordance with the
afarementioned
being the one previously mentioned or spoken of
aforementioned
 viewpoints it is lucidly clear that
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although
 there are great numbers of reasons which are increasing the rubbish but it still can be
contolled
restrained or managed or kept within certain bounds
controlled
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 Regime
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public and companies should seriously pay more attention in
this
 matter.

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