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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

#places #homes #space #countryside #people
Nowadays, due to population explosion there is no
space
 vacant for buildings. Peoples moving to
Countryside
 to find a new
space
 in their home. In accord with me, I am not in favour of moving outside of the
city
area
 and ruin the beautiful scenery. In
this
 essay I draw your attention towards the pros and cons of making homes in the
countryside
. Let's begin by looking at the advantage of moving outside of the
city
area
 and make new buildings at
countryside
 is greenery and clean atmosphere. In urban
area
, due to lots of vehicles there is a pollution problem and today peoples are very health conscious, they need healthy lifestyle for themselves and for their families.
Secondly
, some people need peaceful environment which is impossible to find in urban areas Peoples do not get peace in
city
Suggestion
the city
cities
 due to lots of population and construction work. Turning to the other side of the argument, due to moving people from big cities to small villages will ruin the
countryside
. As we can see that lots people damages the environment. Another issue is that we have to make some difference between the cities and the
countryside
. If lots of people are moving from
city
 to
countryside
Accept comma addition
countryside, then
then
countryside
 will
also
 become a
city
 with lots of problems. All things considered, people want to move from urban
area
 to rural
area
 in search of a vacant
space
 for buildings. Mass moving of people will ruin the beauty of the country side. In my opinion, we have to remain our
countryside
 as it is and we have to construct multistory buildings to overcome the
space
 problem.

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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Ecological benefits
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Carbon sequestration
  • Sustainable development
  • Eco-friendly building materials
  • Green architecture
  • Government policies
  • Urban sprawl
  • Infrastructure
  • Smart planning
  • Agricultural lands
  • Rural areas
  • Population growth
  • Environmental sensitivity
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