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1. Over consuming sugar is unhealthy. Some people think that governments should take responsibility to control it. Others think that individuals should take responsibility for sugar intake. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Everyone knows that excess of everything is bad,
likewise
 if we take
sugar
 in excess
amount
then
 it is harmful for health. Some people think that it is the sole
responsibility
 of the higher authorities to control it,
however
,
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,
others hold the view that it is the
responsibility
 of a human. In my opinion, both approaches
is
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are
 the ideal solution to solve the problem.
To begin
 with
former 's view
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the former ' s view
, the governments should take some initiatives
,
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,
like they can check the content and composition of sugary products before marketing of any sugary items.
In addition
, the state authorities should aware the people
to take
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take
 the
sugar
 in proper
amount
 and
also
 tell them about the health related issues due to over consuming of
sugar
, to
instace
an occurrence of something
instance
, they can organise awareness camps in which people come to know about
health hazards
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the health hazards
 of taking too much
sugar
. As
regarding
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regards
 to later view, it is
also
 the
responsibility
 of an individual to take
sugar
,
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,
for example
, the people can
chek
examine so as to determine accuracy, quality, or condition
check
 the
amount
 of
sugar
 before buying any sugary product if there is more
amount
 of
sugar
 in it
then
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than
 they can avoid it.
Moreover
, if people do not have a will to
cotrol
power to direct or determine
control
it
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it, then
then
 any government
can not
can not
cannot
 do nothing
,
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,
so it is the
responsibility
 of an individual too as well as government. In recapitulate, both methods discuss above can provide the relief to
this
 issue
,
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,
but it is my opinion that if a person
can not
can not
cannot
 take it seriously
then
 nothing is done by
government
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the government
 there.
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