It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It has been a controversial topic among
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, since recent past, that the government bodies and
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people think that the authorities
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to consider in investing in state-of-art buildings. As per my understanding, it is equally important to allocate funds, not only for old premises, but
also
for modern properties. It is a norm in every part of the world to take care of old buildings
such
as churches, temples, museums and lands which are considered as UNESCO heritage sites,
for instance
, Sigiriya Rock Fortress.
Therefore
, relevant authorities should spend massive amount to preserve the national cultural places, arts and paintings, sculptures, since
this
plays a vital role in the culture and brand equity of the country, which should be
transfered
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to the future generation.
However
, investing only for the old lands will not be sufficient for the development of the nation, to attain the target to become a developed country from the prevailing state.
Hence
, new infrastructure
such
as, gyms, apartments, new attraction sites like 'Sydney Opera House' which has a unique and panoramic view must be
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not only to enhance the living conditions of the inhabitants, but
also
to market the country among the tourists. As a conclusion, I would say spending fair amount of finances in both the aspects,
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re-building old building and constructing modern premises are crucial, but investing
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in
tangible assets will not be enough to improve the quality of life, for which government should pay
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