These days, we are seeing an increasing amount of violence on television, and this is having a negative impact on children's behaviour. Do you agree or disagree?

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Watching
television
nowadays is
become
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becoming
a part of people daily activities to
spent
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spend
our leisure time and gathering new information worldwide.
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the other side, some people believe that seeing
television
give
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gives
a negative effect to
children
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children's
child's
child
behaviour. While
this
is understandable, I strongly believe that each opinion has a strong
reasons
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reason
. Not only adult people, but
also
children who watch
television
. Some
television
daily programs showing a violence on their
TV
program
. Many people link violence on
television
with the real world. Children who do not have a mind border
yetusually
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yet usually
copying behaviour they see on the screen.
For example
, in
Indonesia in
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Indonesia, in
these recent years children delinquency increased dramatically. They do crimes based on violence they saw
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on
TV
.
This
trend makes them become a
criminals some
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criminals, some
criminal some
criminal criminal some
case
make
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makes
someone
lost
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lose
their life.
Consequently
, some
TV
programs giving a negative impacts to
children future
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a child's future
child's future
the child's future
children's future
.
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On
the other hand, we can
also
get some benefits by watching
television
. By seeing
television
, children can gather information and make learning more fun. We can update our knowledge about global events. The evidence of
this
case can be seen that nowadays, by watching
Discovery Channel
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the Discovery Channel
or National Geographic, young people will get a new edification
.
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.
Children will have
awareness
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an awareness
aboutworld
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about world
wild and know about
new place
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the new place
new places
a new place
without
have
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having
to go there.
In addition
,
television
have
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has
another function. For some children who does not have much time to play outside, seeing
TV
program
is one of a best way to relax.
For example
, now on nearly all of
TV
station has a comedy
programs
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program
.
This
program
brings the best comedian, which
last
decades only
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decades, only
can be seen in
circus
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the circus
, into our homes.
This
program
will entertain and refresh children mind after their
grueling
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gruelling
day. To sum up, it is evident that seeing
television
has
advantages
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advantages, although
although
it
is
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has also given
is also given
also gives
also
give negative effect. To reduce the negative impact for children, parents and the society should pay more attention to young kids and selected
TV
program
that children watched.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • desensitize
  • mimicking
  • aggressive
  • idolize
  • fear or anxiety
  • social interactions
  • mental health
  • proactive
  • supervision
  • content
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