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The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The First chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.

The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The First chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.
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The First chart provides information about some reasons why adults want to study. The interest in
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 and gaining qualifications are by far the most chosen with
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40% and 38% respectively.
This
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 is followed by how studying can be
helpfull
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helpful
 in your actual job, with
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22% of
people
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 who chose
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 reason. It is surprising to note that promoting or enjoying like reasons to study remain in the fourth place with
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20%.
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,
at the end
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 of the chart, we can see how the least reasons why
people
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 chose to study are
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being
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 able to change a job and
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meet
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 other
people
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 with less than 15%. Le tus look at the
second
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 chart now, where we can see the percentages about how
people
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 think the cost of
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education should be shared. Most
of
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the
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people
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 think that the cost of the course should be
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assumed
individual
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as individual
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,
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 means that
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40% of the total think
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 way. Like
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second
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the second
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 option we can find the employer to share the course´s cost, with
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35%.
At the
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third
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 option is the taxpayer with a 25%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "second".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage distribution
  • stakeholders
  • pursue further education
  • financial contribution
  • survey results
  • policy implications
  • correlation
  • adult education
  • distribution of costs
  • significant differences
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