The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts compare the
expenditure
of
household
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households
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in
Japan
and
Malaysia
in terms of five different categories in 2010.
Overall
,
it is clear that
both nations allocated most of their budget
on
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housing, food and other goods and services,
while
health
care and transport
were
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accounted for
least
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amount.
However
, the figure
of
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health
and transport in
Japan
was exactly double than
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of Malaysian’s
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Malaysian’s
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Malaysia’s
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expenditure
. In
Malaysia
, 34% of the total budget was
being
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spent on housing, which is the largest portion of household
expenditure
in
Malaysia
.
On the other hand
,
this
sector was responsible
21
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for 21
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%
in
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of
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Japan
. Again, the greatest portion of spending was
other
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on other
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good
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goods
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and services in
Japan
, at 29%,
while
in
Malaysia
,
this
figure was
a
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lower than
Japan
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in Japan
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, at 26%. In terms of food, both countries spent relatively
similar
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, 24% for
Japan
and for
Malaysia
it is 27%.
Furthermore
, the lowest portion of
expenditure
was
health
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on health
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care in both countries. People in
Malaysia
spent 3% on
health
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sector and transport represented 10% of the total household budget. These figures were exactly doubled in
Japan
.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, japan, malaysia, health with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.

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