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Some expert believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary. Do the advantage of this outweigh the disadvantage

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Learning a foreign
language
 is primary
school
 rather than secondary
school
 is considered as more effective option by few experts.
However
, I believe that pupils in secondary
school
 will be more benefited with acquiring knowledge of
language
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a language
languages
 other than own mother younger. Primary
school
 students are very young to understand their aims and goals in life. They already have multiple subjects to study and
majority
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the majority
are
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is
 new or the one they have never learned prior. I believe younger should have study and play balance rather
then
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than
 bombarding them with new
language
 they should be
give
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given
 enough time to solidify their base. There are
also
 studies that have proved that young minds pick up new
language fast as
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language as fast as
 compared to elders, but elementary
school
 students should stick to the basics By the time a primary
school
 child is admitted in higher
school he
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school, he
 is aware
on
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of
 the future plan, on the basis of
thowr
of them or themselves
their
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 gaols and education needs, some might opt for German and others might learn Japanese considering their learning necessity. Fee secondary
school
also have
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also has
compulsory
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a compulsory second language enrolment
compulsory second language enrolment
second
language
 enrollment along with a
feild
a piece of land cleared of trees and usually enclosed
field
 trip to the foreign country which develops the
kids
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kids'
 interest.
Also secondary
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Also, secondary
 student are more mature to understand their
language
 learning skills as compared to elementary
school
. To summarise a study
from
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of
 primary
school
 might opt to learn
foreign
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foreign languages
a foreign language
language
 on
basis
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the basis
 of his
parents
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parents'
 suggestions not pressure, but the secondary grade
chily
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Chily
child
chilly
 is aware about the needs and will enjoy the new
language
 experience rather
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 getting pressurise
.
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.
 It's
is
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been
 better to have higher grade students learn
cure
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the cure
 for foreign
language
 rather than drowning primary
school
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
 under pressure.

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