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It is a commonly held belief that the death penalty is a good deterrent to prevent heinous crimes. However, others believe that life long sentence is a better deterrent. Discuss both views.

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In the
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 years, the capital punishment effectiveness has been one of the main issues of discussion within the international community, with countries against it and others in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of it. It's a matter of fact that while some people consider tough punishments, like
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the death penalty
penalty
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, necessary to avoid terrible crimes, others prefer long
life
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 imprisonment and are demanding to abolish
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the death penalty
penalty
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. On one side, in some countries, the
death
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penalty
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 is still present in many juridical systems. While in some nations, like the United States, it is applied for heinous crimes
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 as murder, in others is a sanction
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 for lower crimes,
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 as drug trafficking.
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 the case of Indonesia.
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, in all these countries, laws reflect the main perception of citizens regarding the relationship between crime and punishment and the necessity to have stronger deterrents to avoid people to do something considered wrong in the society.
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 but not least, we have
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 to consider that from a political point of view capital punishment is sometimes very useful to extreme right political parties, in order to get more votes from citizens convinced that crime is particularly present in our cities.
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, most of the European countries have abolished
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the death penalty
penalty
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, considering that against human rights and they have preferred to apply
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the long life sentence
life
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 sentence in
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the case
 of grave crimes.
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 of all, in these nations, the main idea is that prison is not just aimed to punish
people but
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people, but
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 to educate them and to prepare them to be part again of the community.
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, politicians are
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 aware that citizen consider human
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 as the most precious value and are not ready to accept state to have
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 great power to decide whenever they can live or die. In conclusion,
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the death penalty
penalty
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 is one of the biggest issues in the international community, especially because some countries still apply it and other decided to abolish it. Part of the public opinion
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considers
 it necessary to prevent terrible crimes, while others prefer long
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 sentence, considering it more effective.
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