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Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that wealthy
countries
 give money to non-developed
countries
.
However
, it does not solve problems
such
 as poverty.
Therefore
, developed nations should provide other kinds of help to the poor nations rather than economic aid. I strongly agree with
this
 statement
due to
 the fact that there are more relevant features
on
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in
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 society that help to improve
the
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apply
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poor
countries
 than financial support. First of all, despite the fact that economic stability is an utmost need nowadays, there are other aspects
such
 as
education
 and welfare that can solve poverty issues substantially.
For example
, in the past
decades
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decades,
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 the government from Canada encouraged a housing project in Colombia that included the construction of more than 1000 prefabricated houses.
Thus
, a huge amount of poor people in Colombia benefited thanks to Canada´s authorities enjoying their houses for a long time period.
In addition
, important features of society like
education
has
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 to be encouraged for the sake and improvement of underdeveloped nations. An excellent example of
this
 occurred
last
 year when a British language company decided to develop a project in
further
education
 and foreign language
education
 in some
countries
 of Africa
such
 as Namibia and Gabon.
Consequently
, the rate of
high quality
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education
 has grown successfully in these
countries
as well as
 their graduated and well-prepared students.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty alleviation
  • economic inequality
  • developing nations
  • foreign aid
  • sustainable growth
  • technical assistance
  • expertise
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • fair trade
  • trade barriers
  • sustainable development
  • environmental conservation
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