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Is freedom of speech necessary in a free society?

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Freedom
 of
speech
 is crucial in modern society.
This
 fundamental right has been adopted since 1948 and it is the core of democracy.
Therefore
freedom
 of
speech
empower
Suggestion
empowers
 people, allow them to raise their voice, express their concerns and criticise the laws.
This
 is the only way people can govern a nation.
Freedom
 is the fragrance of a beautiful and welfare society.
Freedom
 of
speech
 is important and it is linked to prosperity. At the end of the day prosperity comes from new ideas, people must be free to share ideas and information that
once was
Suggestion
had once been
 controversial.
However
, some people feel that
freedom
 of
speech
 has been lately misused for different interests. May it be
defamation
Suggestion
defamatory
, criticizing celebrities or even using insults against other people. Not choosing words carefully may result in harming a
person whereas
Accept comma addition
person, whereas
 some words can
also
 incite a community or a religion.
For example
 on
7th
Suggestion
the 7th
 of January 2015 two members of a terrorist group, forced their way into the offices of the a French satirical weekly newspaper in Paris. Armed with weapons, they killed 12 people and injured 11 others.
This
 can result in fights amongst people, resulting in chaos and damage to property and lives.
Hence
, checks and balances need to be maintained as a part of
freedom
 of
speech
. Overall, according to my point of view, we cannot build a better society if we don’t take into account people opinion.
That is
 why
freedom
 of
speech
 is essential in all civilised societies.
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