Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

This
essay will discuss about the effects of
overtime
. In my opinion disadvantages of
work
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working
long hours
is
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are
greater than its advantages. Nowadays some people
work
overtime
everyday. As a
consequence they
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consequence, they
finish their task, earn much salaries, and assessed well by their employers. In many countries,
overtime
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over time
one our salary is as half as casual 30 minutes salary. Even in Japan, the fee is counted starting from 81th
overtime
in a month. So the companies use their
workers
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workers'
worker's
effort free. Some modern CEO and chief officers see employers who
work
long hours has not enough skills to finish
task
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the task
tasks
a task
in time.
Also
work
more than regular
hours bring
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hours to bring
stress to people and it
effects
have an effect upon
affects
their performance. Some employers let their employees
work
many hours in a day, even during the holidays. So these employers
does not have
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do not have
enough time to spend with their families, friends and develop themselves.

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